and

this sentence:

"You are a really good writer not least because you are fresh and funny; you puncture other people's balloons, you see quirky things; you have your own style and it's been brilliant. But the latest one reads as if you were dissatisfied with your old voice and looking for a new one, one which you hope will be more employable. "

is trying to do far too much. It looks clunky with those uncomfortably wedged-in semi-colons interchanged with a comma for no apparent reason.

Do one.

:-p

Posted By: Steve in Holland on October 25th 2010 at 11:45:20

Message Thread

Oi Otto (General Chat) - Old Git, Oct 25, 11:41:01
- Poor old Otto did have to spend the day with the wrath crew though so his head probably (General Chat) - lovely old job, Oct 25, 12:25:50
  - FFFS! (n/m) (General Chat) - megson, Oct 25, 12:36:19
  - HER head, HER (General Chat) - Old Git, Oct 25, 12:36:13
    - Yes, sorry and thanks for pointing out. (n/m) (General Chat) - lovely old job, Oct 25, 12:44:35
      - *rolls eyes* I mean how difficult can it BE!!?? (n/m) (General Chat) - Old Git, Oct 25, 12:46:39
        
        I see the person, not the person's sexuality or gender. (n/m) (General Chat) - lovely old job, Oct 25, 12:57:05
        
        ^^^^^ Expertly deploys secondary chute (n/m) (General Chat) - megson, Oct 25, 12:59:12
        
        But I do and I don't know Otto very well and I certainly would be very upset if I had or (General Chat) - lovely old job, Oct 25, 13:03:25
        
        Loj. Stop digging. You won't have. At all. See down there VVVVV (n/m) (General Chat) - megson, Oct 25, 13:08:16
        
        her (General Chat) - Steve in Holland, Oct 25, 13:07:10
        
        fuck it I int very good at this am I. (n/m) (General Chat) - lovely old job, Oct 25, 13:10:45
        
        You also need to sit with us next time. I'd like to discuss all that is wrong with the (General Chat) - megson, Oct 25, 13:17:48
        
        I still carry the hangover of that day Meggers, I was at a Bday party Saturday (General Chat) - lovely old job, Oct 25, 13:20:09
        
        This is allowable you are excused! The general consensus following your brief hello (General Chat) - megson, Oct 25, 13:27:48
        
        ^^^ This! ^^^ (General Chat) - Ottosson Foxtrot, Oct 25, 13:36:36
        
        thanks folks , I will do my best. (n/m) (General Chat) - lovely old job, Oct 25, 13:40:46
    - It's not that clear really (General Chat) - pants, Oct 25, 12:41:45
      - There may well be people who don't know (General Chat) - Old Git, Oct 25, 12:46:06
        
        Me too to be honest and I must say I was rather disappointed not to read Otto's take on (General Chat) - Steve in Holland, Oct 25, 12:48:13
      - lol (n/m) (General Chat) - Steve in Holland, Oct 25, 12:43:35
    - Good job, fella (n/m) (General Chat) - Steve in Holland, Oct 25, 12:38:13
  - Unless it was done covertly, I don't think any Roti cruet robbery was committed. (General Chat) - Arizona Bay, Oct 25, 12:28:04
    - I think you will find ... (General Chat) - meeky, Oct 25, 12:46:50
      - Brilliant. Top work James Nasium (n/m) (General Chat) - Arizona Bay, Oct 25, 13:53:53
    - Was Todge in the concrete ? Still love his story about Unlce Ken (n/m) (General Chat) - Steve in Holland, Oct 25, 12:28:45
      - He turned up just as they left... (n/m) (General Chat) - Garry Brooke, Oct 25, 12:29:14
  - lol (n/m) (General Chat) - megson, Oct 25, 12:27:02
- Thanks for that (General Chat) - Ottosson Foxtrot, Oct 25, 11:53:28
  - I read your bit in The League Paper a minute ago. (General Chat) - Garry Brooke, Oct 25, 11:57:39
  - My pleasure (General Chat) - Old Git, Oct 25, 11:55:22
    - APB did the saving, really, I just stood there and kept an eye on things! (General Chat) - Ottosson Foxtrot, Oct 25, 11:59:12
      - *Blushes* (General Chat) - APB, Oct 25, 12:42:24
        
        ^^^^He can, it's true. (n/m) (General Chat) - Garry Brooke, Oct 25, 12:45:57
  - ^ thinly veiled fuck off Git post ^ (n/m) (General Chat) - duke of york, Oct 25, 11:54:03
    - I don't tend to veil my 'fuck off Git' posts! (n/m) (General Chat) - Ottosson Foxtrot, Oct 25, 11:57:28
      - lik uve got da guts 4 dat (General Chat) - Skinner, Oct 25, 12:00:42
- i thought suffern was up with it, but couldnt put my finger on it (General Chat) - Tombs, Oct 25, 11:45:41
- and (General Chat) - Steve in Holland, Oct 25, 11:45:20
  - That's two sentences. The clue is in the use of the ".". (n/m) (General Chat) - Arizona Bay, Oct 25, 11:59:29
    - Schteve's only doing it because he loves Otto and wants to defend him (General Chat) - Old Git, Oct 25, 12:18:17
      - *her* (n/m) (General Chat) - Ralf Scrampton, Oct 25, 12:21:17
        
        Oh fuck (General Chat) - Old Git, Oct 25, 12:28:28
      - Her (General Chat) - Steve in Holland, Oct 25, 12:20:34
      - Gitters (General Chat) - megson, Oct 25, 12:20:25
        
        Good work fella! (n/m) (General Chat) - malkybarkid, Oct 25, 12:23:06
        
        Haha! (General Chat) - Ottosson Foxtrot, Oct 25, 12:24:25
        
        Considering the (justified) stick i get for that, I consider it my mission in life now! (n/m) (General Chat) - megson, Oct 25, 12:28:03
        
        It happens, don't worry too much about it. (General Chat) - Ottosson Foxtrot, Oct 25, 12:36:24
        
        Agreed, it isn't on here. Gits right about the meeting, it does seperate the mental image (General Chat) - megson, Oct 25, 12:48:16
        
        loj has just done one up there ^^^ (n/m) (General Chat) - Ralf Scrampton, Oct 25, 12:34:32
        
        I know, I lolled that instead, as the content was funny. I'll add a FFFS! (n/m) (General Chat) - megson, Oct 25, 12:36:05
        
        good stuff. (n/m) (General Chat) - Ralf Scrampton, Oct 25, 12:38:50
        
        Good day all round Saturday wasn't it? How was the dungeon? (n/m) (General Chat) - malkybarkid, Oct 25, 12:26:29
        
        At the risk of talking something up (General Chat) - megson, Oct 25, 12:31:26
        
        Yep. (n/m) (General Chat) - malkybarkid, Oct 25, 12:32:19
        
        I'm sorry. (n/m) (General Chat) - megson, Oct 25, 12:46:19
        
        ? (General Chat) - malkybarkid, Oct 25, 12:51:54
        
        I thought I may have talked up the aforementioned (General Chat) - megson, Oct 25, 12:57:39
        
        ah (n/m) (General Chat) - malkybarkid, Oct 25, 12:58:19
        
        The dungeon was perfectly serviceable as a place to sleep. (General Chat) - Ottosson Foxtrot, Oct 25, 12:27:43
        
        How do you know there wasn't? (General Chat) - Garry Brooke, Oct 25, 12:28:43
        
        Actually, that would explain an awful lot ... (n/m) (General Chat) - Ottosson Foxtrot, Oct 25, 12:29:45
        
        Git's old skool - he doesn't get all this gender bending lark (n/m) (General Chat) - duke of york, Oct 25, 12:21:53
      - Seconded! (n/m) (General Chat) - Garry Brooke, Oct 25, 12:19:13
    - That is an all. Cos (like I just did), he chucked in a random full stop. (n/m) (General Chat) - Steve in Holland, Oct 25, 12:13:43
- "The result is that the reports wasn't a good read" (General Chat) - Steve in Holland, Oct 25, 11:43:09

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