my new poem - what do you think? - Wrath of the Barclay

my new poem - what do you think?

Although you hide in the ebb and flow
Of the pale tide when the moon has set,
The people of coming days will know
About the casting out of my net,
And how you have leaped times out of mind
Over the little silver cords,
And think that you were hard and unkind,
And blame you with many bitter words.

Posted By: lovely old job on April 23rd 2008 at 13:14:07

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my new poem - what do you think? (General Chat) - lovely old job, Apr 23, 13:14:07
- If you must write prose and poems the words you use should be your own, (General Chat) - jafski, Apr 23, 13:18:16
  - People who thought LOJ was really suggesting he had written that poem (General Chat) - Old Git, Apr 23, 13:54:34
    - I inferred that from the statement "my new poem" which indicated he was the author. (General Chat) - jafski, Apr 23, 14:00:51
      - Excessive use of the word I in the last line spoils it. (n/m) (General Chat) - sheffieldcanary, Apr 23, 14:03:11
        
        He only used it once, how can that be excessive? (n/m) (General Chat) - Old Git, Apr 23, 14:07:04
        
        On reflection, yes. That serves to demonstrate the value of a good proof reader. (n/m) (General Chat) - jafski, Apr 23, 14:06:03
      - my new GF (General Chat) - harry boulders, Apr 23, 14:02:52
        
        That looks suspiciously like a handprint on her tum (n/m) (General Chat) - Old Git, Apr 23, 14:05:27
    - Someone called loj OG earlier (n/m) (General Chat) - malkybarkid, Apr 23, 13:56:29
      - I was trying to pretend that that hadn't happened (General Chat) - Old Git, Apr 23, 14:00:10
        
        as was I (n/m) (General Chat) - lovely old job, Apr 23, 14:11:15
  - lovely old job you are soooo busted (n/m) (General Chat) - harry boulders, Apr 23, 13:51:09
  - Loliterature (n/m) (General Chat) - lovely old job, Apr 23, 13:21:29
- Shite. (n/m) (General Chat) - tudders, Apr 23, 13:15:04
  - what about this one (General Chat) - lovely old job, Apr 23, 13:16:15
    - There once was a chap called Job (n/m) (General Chat) - Kings Lynn Canary, Apr 23, 13:20:27
      - There once was a chap called loj (General Chat) - camcan, Apr 23, 13:44:25
        
        haha (n/m) (General Chat) - lovely old job, Apr 23, 13:46:02
      - OK. Who liked to put things in his gob..... (n/m) (General Chat) - Tricky Hawes, Apr 23, 13:41:45
        
        standing there in the Kings (n/m) (General Chat) - Kings Lynn Canary, Apr 23, 13:43:50
        
        gob doesnt rhyme with jobe (General Chat) - Kings Lynn Canary, Apr 23, 13:42:44
        
        rolf (n/m) (General Chat) - lovely old job, Apr 23, 13:45:53
      - Whose ear had a very large lobe (n/m) (General Chat) - Tricky Hawes, Apr 23, 13:22:42
        
        When he was designed (General Chat) - yarmyyarmy, Apr 23, 13:23:53
        
        he also played cricket (n/m) (General Chat) - Kings Lynn Canary, Apr 23, 13:23:33
        
        but his big mid wicket (n/m) (General Chat) - lovely old job, Apr 23, 13:24:40
        
        was really a corn on the cob (n/m) (General Chat) - Kings Lynn Canary, Apr 23, 13:27:24
        
        that neither rhymes nor makes sense. (n/m) (General Chat) - Tricky Hawes, Apr 23, 13:31:01
        
        you started with the non rhyming no sense (n/m) (General Chat) - Kings Lynn Canary, Apr 23, 13:32:29
        
        ^^^^^^doesn't know how to pronounce Job^^^^^^^ (General Chat) - Tricky Hawes, Apr 23, 13:33:43
        
        Isn't that a bit like saying "Doesn't know how to pronounce envelope" (General Chat) - malkybarkid, Apr 23, 13:36:46
        
        No. (n/m) (General Chat) - Tricky Hawes, Apr 23, 13:38:53
        
        Are you sure? (n/m) (General Chat) - malkybarkid, Apr 23, 13:40:00
        
        yes. (n/m) (General Chat) - Tricky Hawes, Apr 23, 13:40:14
        
        Scone to rhmye with cone. (General Chat) - Arizona Bay, Apr 23, 13:37:56
        
        I'm with Mrs AB (General Chat) - camcan, Apr 23, 13:42:17
        
        What about Nougat (nugget)? (n/m) (General Chat) - Small, Apr 23, 13:44:19
        
        Marathon! Peanuts and nooogar (General Chat) - malkybarkid, Apr 23, 13:47:04
        
        that's a reverse situation (General Chat) - camcan, Apr 23, 13:45:36
        
        Roffl (n/m) (General Chat) - Kings Lynn Canary, Apr 23, 13:37:41
        
        Lovely Old Jobe (n/m) (General Chat) - Kings Lynn Canary, Apr 23, 13:34:49
        
        oh. yes. Sorry. (General Chat) - Tricky Hawes, Apr 23, 13:35:49
        
        but knob doesnt rhyme with loj (n/m) (General Chat) - Kings Lynn Canary, Apr 23, 13:36:49
        
        But knob & loj do go together! (n/m) (General Chat) - lovely old job, Apr 23, 13:37:43
        
        quite often so i have heard (n/m) (General Chat) - Kings Lynn Canary, Apr 23, 13:38:22
        
        Todg (n/m) (General Chat) - malkybarkid, Apr 23, 13:37:19
        
        so don't sit on the fence. (n/m) (General Chat) - lovely old job, Apr 23, 13:31:52
        
        or do a bit of a tent (n/m) (General Chat) - Small, Apr 23, 13:33:33
    - Good. I assume you know it's Shakespear's birthday today. (n/m) (General Chat) - tudders, Apr 23, 13:19:00
    - Do you also play guitar OG? (General Chat) - mike_the_sphinx, Apr 23, 13:17:52
      - no, but I am quite good at elastic bands on a shoe box. (n/m) (General Chat) - lovely old job, Apr 23, 13:19:05
        
        Is that actually legal? (n/m) (General Chat) - mike_the_sphinx, Apr 23, 13:20:10

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