Good. Minor, but, 2nd paragraph " ...over a problem we had caused."

You don't want to give the impression that you had a part in causing the problem personally. Try "The second example involved the threat by a customer to 'write to the papers' and contact the 'DWP ombudsman' over a problem which had occurred."

While I'm here, first paragraph, only use the abbreviations TDA and Jsaps if you're completely sure that everyone who reads it knows what they are, 'cos I haven't the faintest.

Run all this past Jafski, he works in recruitment. I say "works".

Posted By: Arizona Bay on December 18th 2009 at 17:19:08

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Genuine Wrath proof reading please. What do you think... (General Chat) - DrDublin, Dec 18, 17:01:45
- I reckon this would be up your street... (General Chat) - Jumbo1, Dec 18, 20:06:25
- you work for DWP? (General Chat) - ingi, Dec 18, 19:51:40
- Good. Minor, but, 2nd paragraph " ...over a problem we had caused." (General Chat) - Arizona Bay, Dec 18, 17:19:08
- ok - first line typo. "roll" should be "role" (General Chat) - shoddy, Dec 18, 17:13:46
  - and another maybe? (General Chat) - shoddy, Dec 18, 17:18:04
- you work too hard (n/m) (General Chat) - selwyn, Dec 18, 17:02:44
  - Why do you have to be nasty all the time? (n/m) (General Chat) - DrDublin, Dec 18, 17:04:04
    - it was a kind of joke ): think u must be working too hard lol (n/m) (General Chat) - selwyn, Dec 18, 17:05:36
      - Sorry Sellers, just a bad time that's all. :) (n/m) (General Chat) - DrDublin, Dec 18, 17:09:13
        
        no worries .good luck mate (n/m) (General Chat) - selwyn, Dec 18, 17:09:55

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