and

this sentence:

"You are a really good writer not least because you are fresh and funny; you puncture other people's balloons, you see quirky things; you have your own style and it's been brilliant. But the latest one reads as if you were dissatisfied with your old voice and looking for a new one, one which you hope will be more employable. "

is trying to do far too much. It looks clunky with those uncomfortably wedged-in semi-colons interchanged with a comma for no apparent reason.

Do one.

:-p

Posted By: Steve in Holland, Oct 25, 11:45:20